About the video:
- i like watching videos where the voiceover is more energetic, more intense. Check out
this guy for instance. It may be even too much, but it still more enjoyable to watch than calm voice.
- don't read the same text, which is written on screen. This is must know for pitching, for example. I bet this is applicable for youtube too
About content:
- this is not common practice, but i'd be glad to see references to the sources of all controversial information
- too crowded. I think, you've decided to put too much information into a single video. It's ok, when you are talking about the same topic, but here you've covered surface of each aspect of the game. So, it's not clear why is this video better than others from informational standpoint and at the same time it contains a too much info to remember. Also, there are plenty of game-review videos out there, so I'd say, focus each video on specific topic. Like here: there are plenty of very detailed tutorials in
this forum thread. Create a videos as detailed as those tutorials for specific topics and pay attention to SEO to make your videos outstand other videos and tutorials about this game
Good luck!