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AshfaqNawaz
02-24-2014, 08:49 AM
Ugh.. Not much of a writer.. but I thought about writing a story line thingy based on this game... I wanted to do this.. since I got inspired by another writer.
Would be great if you could check it out and give me a possible feedback :)

The Division - #1. Breaking The Silence (http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-tom-clancys-division-1-breaking.html)

The Division - #2. Flash Back. (http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-division-2flash-back.html)


http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-tom-clancys-division-1-breaking.html

http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-division-2flash-back.html

Thank you.. :)

Mr_Shade
02-24-2014, 01:38 PM
Thanks for posting - We all enjoy Fan Fiction based on the games, so I will make sure the team see this ;)

Ubi_Antoine
02-24-2014, 03:02 PM
Thanks man, I'll have a read soon :)

AshfaqNawaz
02-24-2014, 05:07 PM
Thanks for posting - We all enjoy Fan Fiction based on the games, so I will make sure the team see this ;)


Thanks man, I'll have a read soon :)

Thank you, Hope you'll enjoy.
Would be great if you could ignore any mistakes or errors. It's kinda my first work. :)


I have added link for the second part.


http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-division-2flash-back.html

Ubi-MoshiMoshi
02-24-2014, 08:28 PM
Awesome, I have bookmarked it to have a read through.

eyanvenom
02-25-2014, 08:52 AM
Just read part 1! Aside from a few grammar related mistakes, it was still easy to follow and fluid. I was able to picture the entire story in my head as I read, and it was very exciting! Will post my response to part 2 soon.

AshfaqNawaz
02-25-2014, 12:17 PM
Awesome, I have bookmarked it to have a read through.

Happy to know :)


Just read part 1! Aside from a few grammar related mistakes, it was still easy to follow and fluid. I was able to picture the entire story in my head as I read, and it was very exciting! Will post my response to part 2 soon.

Yeah I know sorry.. for the errors and stuff..
Glad you liked it :)
Thank you for your time. :D

eyanvenom
02-26-2014, 01:12 AM
Here are a few of my favorite parts from #2 Flash Back

"....They weren't just thieves or local teams, They were hired by someone else... to stop us from bringing back peace. Well in a way the distress call was an ambush..."
This sounds like an awesome concept for the game, and I'm sure we will run into plenty of instances just like this. Epic!

"...Until our drone showed up. It's not just a normal drone, It was specially designed for our us..."
Great point here. I hope the 'companion drone' will be customizable to suit different squads in different ways, and not 100% identical to everyone else's drone!

"...There was nothing much to find, No data's no people..no food no water.. no weapons.. Everything have been taken away... By someone else..."
I think this is something the game should adopt, instead of always rewarding the player with constant loot. There should be some instances of disappointment and helplessness, even if it doesn't involve another player's squad taking loot before you. What I mean is that this should happen at times in Private Zones-- fighting to take over an area, just to find no loot or supplies or weaponry available after all the fighting subsides. Keeps things realistic and unpredictable, although I would not want this to happen often! ;)

Lastly, the main character sure blacks out a lot lol. Cool story bro ;)

AshfaqNawaz
02-27-2014, 07:52 PM
Here are a few of my favorite parts from #2 Flash Back

"....They weren't just thieves or local teams, They were hired by someone else... to stop us from bringing back peace. Well in a way the distress call was an ambush..."
This sounds like an awesome concept for the game, and I'm sure we will run into plenty of instances just like this. Epic!

"...Until our drone showed up. It's not just a normal drone, It was specially designed for our us..."
Great point here. I hope the 'companion drone' will be customizable to suit different squads in different ways, and not 100% identical to everyone else's drone!

"...There was nothing much to find, No data's no people..no food no water.. no weapons.. Everything have been taken away... By someone else..."
I think this is something the game should adopt, instead of always rewarding the player with constant loot. There should be some instances of disappointment and helplessness, even if it doesn't involve another player's squad taking loot before you. What I mean is that this should happen at times in Private Zones-- fighting to take over an area, just to find no loot or supplies or weaponry available after all the fighting subsides. Keeps things realistic and unpredictable, although I would not want this to happen often! ;)

Lastly, the main character sure blacks out a lot lol. Cool story bro ;)

Thanks for the feedback mate :-)
Glad you enjoyed it :) I'll do my level best on the 3rd series.... won't be posting it soon... kinda got exams so...

eyanvenom
02-28-2014, 01:56 AM
Thanks for the feedback mate :-)
Glad you enjoyed it :) I'll do my level best on the 3rd series.... won't be posting it soon... kinda got exams so...

I as well, friend...midterms right around the corner!

AshfaqNawaz
02-08-2015, 06:07 PM
Can't for the game... actually <3

Been trying to write the Part 3 <3 Will be posting the link sooon :')



Park 1 : http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-tom-clancys-division-1-breaking.html

Part 2 : http://essentializer.blogspot.in/2014/02/ubisoft-division-2flash-back.html